Wednesday, March 7, 2012

Elds-vimr (Fire-whims) # 2


A second pass at auroras today. I´m trying to get my imagery more consistent throughout a verse. In this verse, I´m using a martial imagery scheme. I hope it works for you.

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Old Norse Line-by-Line Translation Prose Order Translation
Egg fránn herjar Oðins
élker norðan birta --
sverða glóa Svǫlnis
svaðil ofan á hrylligr.
Borgar manna birting
blinda ljósa skjolda.
Drauma hirðmanns drepa
dreka krókar blóði.
Edge-flashing army Oðins
storm-vessel northern brightens;
sword glows of Svǫlnis
frozen lands over ghastly.
Wall men´s brightness
blinds light-shields;
dreams hirthman´s kill
dragon coils bloody.
The flashing edge of Odin´s army
brightens the northern storm-vessel;
Svǫlnis´s sword glows over
the ghastly frozen ground.
The wall of light-shields
blinds men´s brightness;
Dragon's bloody coils
kill hirthman´s dreams.
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Kennings Used

Egg fránn herjar Oðins > flashing edge of the Army of Oðin > the AURORA
élker > storm vessel > SKY
Svǫlnis sverða > sword of Svǫlnis [Oðinn] > the AURORA
Borgar ljósa skjólda > wall of light-shields > the AURORA
manna birting > man´s brightness > man´s VISION
dreka krókar blóði >  dragon´s bloody coils > the AURORA

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